चाँद (मून)

Beauty of my moon is the same what i felt almost three years ago, when I see my moon I feel the same even today. The sacred beauty in him with no scars ,even the real moon can’t beat my virtual one. The moon of my dreams shine brighter, day by day year by year… Forever

ऐ चाँद ! तेरी चाँदनी को देखा,

पर ख़ैर मना चकोर ने,

मेरे चाँद को न देखा ..

उसकी आँखों की पुतलियाँ ,

तेरी गोलाई से ज़्यादा गोल है ,

करतब इतनी उन पुतलियों में इतनी,

की तेरी कलाओं में नहीं देखा …

कहानियाँ तेरे दाग़ की सुनी

पर चेहरा क्या देखना ,

मेरे चाँद के चरणों में भी किसिने ,

दाग़ नहीं देखा …

रूप इतना की तेरी ज्योत्सना का,

रंग भी फीका लगने लगे ,

पर घमंड और ग़ुरूर जो तुझमें है,

मेरे चाँद में किसी ने ना देखा ….

है निवेदन ! “निवेदिता ” का

आ देख ! और जान जो नूर मेरे चाँद में है,

वो तूने भी कभी ना देखा … “निवेदिता”


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51 responses to “चाँद (मून)”

  1. extinct0703 Avatar

    Wahh wahh kya kehne, behad umdaa

      1. extinct0703 Avatar

        Your words so simple so serene yet so expressive.

        1. bhaatdal Avatar

          Thank you for your kindness your comments really matter. Now your turn. Waiting to read

          1. extinct0703 Avatar

            I am honoured! I’ll write something soon.

  2. Tanay style's Avatar

    All the best & simply wow!!!

    1. bhaatdal Avatar

      ख़ूब ख़ूब आभार

  3. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

    Beautifully penned. Bow !!
    There is an inclination I have towards soliloquy with nature. Used to write about it before. Its so happy to see you have done that with utmost love.
    The moon is a way to serendipity in the melancholy and silence of the dark skies. Your words have ceremoniously proclaimed its serene nature.
    To call it yours and to express your remorse at things you feel about the moon, awesome ! You have managed to send me into a trance of thoughts about my childhood days and memories of the moon. Back in school, before digital media helped me document my write ups, I remember writing about nature , especially the moon and its grace.

    1. bhaatdal Avatar

      From past two days I am trying to reply a thanks to you ,but everytime I open the blog ,I find no words to start with . I did this almost fifteen times since yesterday. What wonderful words wow !! Your support seems like some poetry. Any gal will fall in love with it and I mean it ,.. Thank God for blessing me freind like you all , so much appreciation for a small work like mine and what a vocabulary you use , it is like reading the classics , Literature .. :*:* I think i should write every day one line so that can read so many beautiful words that too personally for me .. Lucky me .. :*

      1. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

        Ok, Nivedita, my dear…. I am flying. I can hardly feel the ground under my feet :* . I cannot ignore your humility and hence your greatness. I feel blessed to have a mate like you. I feel blessed to read things you write. Let me call it listening to the beats within, because your words have life.
        Not for the sake of comments 😛 , but would definitely love to read even if its a line, your style. I feel honored to be in your company and to be called a mate. Need no girl to fall in love when you have loved my words. I am emotional now 🙁 Somebody soothe me 🙂 :*

        1. bhaatdal Avatar

          Awwww !! Hugss ..so so touching !! Speechless.. 🙂 :*

          1. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

            Hugs back at you :* :* Waiting for your next 🙂

      2. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

        Ok, I can’t tell you enough of what I felt. I am short of words now. I have no idea what I just wrote. 😮

        1. bhaatdal Avatar

          Hahaha , you short of words ??? :* m already on the ninth cloud .. 🙂 🙂 feeling like in ……… So much to say but can’t. Leaving my feelings unsaid for now .. :):) …….. you are flattering me and i am enjoying it ..

          1. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

            Yes. I leave it to your imagination too, the most beautiful place to trip on. :* Nothing more enjoyable than to have you enjoy 🙂

          2. bhaatdal Avatar

            Aaahan ! I am already , no wonder i live in my “shopon bari ” , mostly And thats how I survive .. Btw Shopon bari means Dream house .. 🙂

          3. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

            😀 I understand Bangla. 🙂 Nice place to dwell 😉

          4. bhaatdal Avatar

            Yessss indeed .. :)(: so nice.. Multi lingual .. Wow !!

          5. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

            🙂 Indeed. 😉 Still learning

          6. bhaatdal Avatar

            I donno much just a lil alpo alpo .. Can speak a lil understand all

          7. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

            Quite the same here. I don’t speak much since people tell me that I have a Non-Indian accent in anything I utter 😛

          8. bhaatdal Avatar

            Hehe no my accent is fine but i happen to mix up assamese with bong unknowingly..

          9. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

            Oh ! You’re from assam?

          10. bhaatdal Avatar

            Good question:) I am from Rajasthan stayed Assam ten yrs , and thirteen years at Meghalaya

  4. Maniparna Sengupta Majumder Avatar

    Another masterpiece from you…take a bow, my friend… 🙂

    1. bhaatdal Avatar

      Oh !! How wonderful to see you read .. Thanks a tonne .. So delighted i am 🙂

      1. Maniparna Sengupta Majumder Avatar

        The pleasure is mine… 🙂

  5. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

    Hey ! I have nominated you for an awards called the Smiley thumb award, because you are beautiful 😉
    Paarticipate here : https://transcendenceishere.wordpress.com/2016/05/05/the-smiley-thumb-award/

    1. bhaatdal Avatar

      Wow thank you so much

      1. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

        🙂 Mention not. Its fun. Check it out.

        1. bhaatdal Avatar

          I did just now and will post tomorrow.. Fresh and with smile 🙂 thanks again 🙂

          1. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

            Okay mate. My pleasure. See you soon 😉

          2. bhaatdal Avatar

            Seeeyah 🙂 soon with new post tonight:)

          3. Sonu Somaraj Avatar

            Wow. Cant wait 😮 I am on something too 😉

  6. Maha Khan Avatar

    This is truly beautiful. It has left me speechless

    1. bhaatdal Avatar

      Thank you for stopping by and reading . It is very kind of you 🙂 keep visiting

  7. voiceofastranger Avatar

    Even moon wouldn’t have a enough words to thank you for describing it in such an glorious way ..:)

  8. JD Avatar

    Wah wah, wah wah 😀 Kya baat hai! Ek dum romantic mood main likha hai 🙂

    1. bhaatdal Avatar

      :p I am feeling like have to ping you to come and read my blog to read to improve your language classes both hindi and gujju 🙂

      1. JD Avatar

        Yaar aap mera tuition le lo, wahi acha hai 😀 agar itni Hindi mujhe aati toh main toh Amitabh Bachan bann gaya hota 😛

  9. fairytaleofasimplegirl Avatar

    Kartab unki putliyo me itana…..wah wah. …oh how did I miss this…..such a playful ďedication to ur partner

    1. bhaatdal Avatar

      🙂 thanks dear ., and you din’t missed anything only I missed your presence . 🙂

  10. Beparvah !! Avatar

    Loved it..
    Thank you got sharing

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